求高手点评雅思“小作文”（剑7 Test2 Task1 ）

求高手点评雅思“小作文”（剑7 Test2 Task1 ）请点评到细节,最好能标明错误,十分感谢This graph gives some information about the consumption of meat and fish from 1979 to 2004 in a Europen country. It illustrates that fish is less popular than the other three kind of meat.We can find that both the cost of beef and lamb experienced a decrease with some fluctuations from 220 grams one person per week and 150 grams to 100 grams and 50grams respectively. However, beef was the top consumed between 1983 and 1988, which is similar to the number of beef, from then on, this number fluctuated around 200 grams until 1993 when another sharp growth was found with 225 grams. The last several years witnessed another upward trend to about 250 by 2004. As for fish, there seemed to be no significant change but a minor reduction from a little over 50 grams in 1979* to less than 50 grams in 2004.请大家从各个角度都来批评一下,我真心希望有人能来提点建设性的建议.能不能在来点人看看啊。。。