求英语老师 帮我作文批改下 4级水平的

你作文呢?
再问： 之前点错了。。之后 只有补充提问 把作文加上了
再答： Shopping On the Internet With the development of technology, more and more people choose to go shopping on the Internet as it has become a fashionable thing and less time is available for people to relax。 Shopping on the Internet can be risky。 On no account can people neglect the fact that only when we receive the things we bought can we know what exactly their worth is。 Besides, it often costs a lot of invisible money and time by shopping on the Internet。 However, with the implements of clearer rules, the phenomenon of cheating and the detriment of shopping on the Internet has been much less than before。 It has brought us convenience to some degree, thus enables us to spend less money on shopping and to save extra money in case some unexpected things happen。 In my opinion, the Internet is a representative of the cutting-edge technology。 Shopping on the Internet has become quite popular now。 We should conform to the trend and make it better。
再问： 谢谢 啊 这样逻辑清楚多了。。我现在经常会犯语法错误
再答： 我只是稍微修改了下，不能保证绝对没有语法错误的。四级加油：）