PLEASE HELP ME MODIFY MY composition,thank you very much

PLEASE HELP ME MODIFY MY composition,thank you very muchAs a chinese girl,I'm pround of the olympic hold in beijing.and I hope China will win the first.Even now i live in Holand,but everyday I watch TV,and everytime when I saw the Chinese win,I feel exciting.As a chinese girl,I'm pround of the Olympic Games is held in beijing.and I hope China will win the first.Even now I'm living in Holand,but everyday I watch TV,and everytime when I see the Chinese win,I feel exciting.ACCORDING TO回答者：十七点零九 - 见习魔法师 三级 ,I HAD CHANGED,IF HAVE ANOTHER ERROR I NEED CHANGE?