英语帝帮我看看这篇作文的语法问题和表达不当之处

翻译得很不错。尤其是你认真诚恳的态度,让人不能不回答,更不能不认真回答。我比较确定的改动用{}[]标示。感觉不太合适但又不知如何改处加?只是个人看法,仅共参考。希望对你有所帮助。有疑问亦可QQ我。讨论哈。The table shows the percentage of expenditure on three categories in consumable in five European countries in 2002。In Turkey,about {the third} [one third of the] expenditure was spent on food,drinks and tobacco,which took up the largest share in the five countries,followed by Ireland with 28。91%。The percentages of the remaining countries were pretty similar (18。80% in Spain,16。36% in Italy,15。77% in Sweden)。{Refer to} [As to] clothing and footwear,it seems that {Italian prefer to buy these two items than the other countries?},which cost them 9。00% in their spending。And around 6。5% [of] money was consumed by {Turkey,Spain and Ireland?each of them?}。Swedish people once again showed the least favor on [in] the two goods like the former ones,with a percentage of 5。40%。However,it is shocked that relatively less money was spent on leisure and education compared with other two categories。The country that devoted the largest {percentage in} [percent of] expenditure [in this category] was Turkey,with a figure of 4。35%,which was only 1。98% in Spain who stood in the last place。{Overall} [In summary],food,drinks and tobacco was a principal daily spending in the five countries in 2002,[though] more money [was] supposed to devote {into} [to] leisure and education。