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请帮忙批改一篇托福独立作文Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:Playing sports teaches people more lessons about the life.Across the world many sports have their own characteristics,but many of these sports have similar attributes.Entertaining is one of the attributes that people can relax and decrease stress.Besides entertaining,more important is playing sports can teach us how to work as a team,and how to win and make choice in our life.To begin with,playing sports can teach us how to cooperate with others.Some sports need to build a team.In the team,our heart must hold together so that we can beat other teams and in the process,we learn to cooperate.In the case of basketball,a basketball team consists of many people.In a match,if everyone just used their own methods and not think about others they must the loser.They just use one method that they think out together and cooperate with others in the team they can win the match.So playing sports teaches us the lesson of cooperation.Besides,we learn persistence in the process.Not all sports we can finish in a short time.For instance,the marathon is one sport which needs a long time and strong perseverance.A marathon is a long distance race and only by finishing this long distance we can win.It is impossible for a person who lacks perseverance to run the complete distance.Even if you are so tired and there remains just one meter which you did not finish you also failed.So during the marathon,as long as we insist on running completing the total distance can we win,even if sometimes we are so tired that we want to give up.This is another lesson that we learn from playing sports.Finally,playing sports can teach us how to choose the thing that is proper us to do.Sometimes,choosing a job is like playing sports.We have to choose the job that is within the range of our ability.Playing sports is like this,such as a short distance race requires a person who is healthy and no heart disease.A cardiac patient needs to choose other sports which have no effects on his heart to keep fit.So in the process of choosing sports to keep fit we can learn how to choose the thing which is suitable for us.All in all,playing sports is beneficial thing.It teaches us how to cooperate with others and how to adhere to do anything.Most important is that it teaches us how to choose in our life which helps us to adapt to life better.So we must to play sports in our daily life because it is a good teacher for our life..