写了一篇小短文,是关于金在中的.英文.老师布置的.发出来 希望英语很好的帮忙改改.看看有没有什么语法错误.

写了一篇小短文,是关于金在中的.英文.老师布置的.发出来 希望英语很好的帮忙改改.看看有没有什么语法错误.HERO is man.The real man.He is born in seoul,south korea 1986.He is a singer,my favorite singer.When he was 17.he has his debut as TVXQ member until 2009.Now he is JYJ member.He is brave and persistence.He has beautiful voice.I so love HERO that I can't stop to pay close attention to them.Love him and love him in the band whatever TVXQ or JYJ.