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We can see that there is a computer which has a horrible teeth has almostly eaten the man's whole body,and an another man is taking a stick and says:" Hold on!I gonna save you!"This picture reacts a question that indulging in Internet games is the most serious problem for teenagers。The Internet is like a huge storeroom full of resources,but if you can't use it in a right way,it gonna be the drug,unhealthy and toxic。As a student,I shouldn't spend such a lot of time on doing this meaningless thing。I think it is a waste of life。Why don't we do other meaningful things?Such as talking with friends,spending time with our family,reading books and making a small trip?I think that it is more meaningful than wasting time on that kind of meaningless things。 再问： Thank a million 。(:Could u tell me how do u think about this composition (more detail ,PLZ)?