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Dear Prof。LambI’m a college(去掉college) student in South China Normal University(校名最好再查查,你这个说法很奇怪）,major in psychology。As yearning towards the top-class education in Cambridge,I do hope to be a postgraduate student in your department in the next year( 去掉 in the,直接说 next year 就好了)。My current GPA is about 3。2。And I have some volunteer experiences which related with psychology also with（把also with 改成 as well as) some research experiences。The highest honor is University Scholarship(你想表达你拿了学校的最高奖学金么,Once I won the highest scholarship in my university）。( And ,加个连接词）My current GPA is about 3。2。(But) my IELTS score have(改成 has) not come out yet。I’m wondering( whether) I am suitable for the MPhil in Social and Developmental Psychology course (or not) 。Thanks for your patient。I am looking forward (to )your reply。Sincerely yours,XXX